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Lost in Time by TheUnoriginal Lost in Time by TheUnoriginal
Another doodle, this one took me two history classes, two science, and one english to finish. Mostly because I didn't know what to add next. I reeeaalllyy like this one! I think it's my favorite so far :D.

For Feedback Frenzy 02:

For this particular piece, critique would be appreciated to help with general design and balance I guess? I don't really know how it works, but any constructive criticism is nice! :D
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teddeyLP Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great details! :)
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UraHameshi Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Looks epic! Keep it up :D
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Emberguard Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   General Artist
This is a critique for the :iconfeedbackfrenzy:#FeedbackFrenzy competition

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I like how you've put a lot of detail into your work. It shows a lot of time and effort has gone into the creating of this piece.

How you want the balance to be within this piecce will really depend on what you want the final effect to be. These two articles/tutorials I've linked below I've found quite an interestinf read and will hopefully give you some things to think about in regards to placing objects and the balance of your picture:
Link #1
Link #2

At the moment the piece does seem top-heavy, but I also think it doesn't need too much more, perhaps only another something in the bottom left would fix it if you wanted to get rid of the top-heaviness. Even though it is top-heavy, I think that's a good thing. When I look at the picture, I get the impression that we're looking from above to down on an angle with those small circles being people rushing past in the city getting lost amongst each other.

I could interpret all of that with the title as well as showing how each individual will be unrecognisable over time. The hour clock represents how time for all of us brings us closer to the end.

To make this image even more effective, I'd suggest putting some colour on the clocks, to show that time is always present, but the people in black and white are lost because they fade away and no one will know they even existed after enough time has passed.

Hope this critique helps :)
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Fayerin Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello :aww: I'm participating in #FeedbackFrenzy contest 02 and i will try to help you :)

What was catch Immediately my attention in your piece was the way you represented the time by using so much elements and a good choice with the contrast. The time is something that we canīt stop every moment we live arond time, arond everything that he controls. I has felt that in your drawing you tried to represent it's power by using so much visual elements like pocket watches, sand clock, wall clock ...

You said in your info drawing that you have done it in differents classes and one more time we can understands some fellings too. Maybe you were anxious after the time for the class over xD that was already happened to me when I do lots of drawings in my notebooks aside :D.
I liked a lot the way you You represented visually the chains to let them completely black among the texture because it was very visible. this aspect was well thought :aww:
To improve this piece i think that you could play kre with the size and the perspective for the 3 watch which are on top maybe not to cutting the tree by the edge of the sheet.
keep going with this typle of composition because You can get great results as visual effects.

I hope that could help you , if you have any question feel free to talk to me :hug:
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racketify Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student General Artist
This is the feedback frenzy contest 2
Everything is really good, the only thing I would improve or a suggestion is to not over complicate the drawing or better yet implement it in an optical illusion or a scene that it would work well in. So the ideal that you have work much better as a piece.
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liyaperfidious Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
Hello! This is =liyaperfidious, a participant in the :iconfeedbackfrenzy: contest.
Here's my critique.

I like the idea. It's used a lot, but yours has a different representation, with different items to measure time.
The checkered hourglass is also something creative.
The image is balanced, not too crowded and the details are fun.
Curvy needle clocks are also awesome.

The thing that needs work is the colouring.
You left out white parts for the solid black colour and some of the black colours encroach on the white strips, most visibly, the one in the middle.
The chains don't look sensible though.
The one in white (left most, below the first one) -- it's left part is larger than the right and it suddenly thins at the bottom.

Suggestions.
The sand in the hour glass. Try doing dots for them. Give them a grainy texture.
For the triangular wooden-like structure around the clocks near those chains, a variation in line thickness would be cool.
And -- when drawing circular objects, try not to overlap the lines.
They are like particles, particles don't have overlapping lines.

LASTLY.
Your awesome art deserves a better paper.

That is all. Thanks for reading this! I hope I make sense and do not confuse you.
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TheUnoriginal Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :love:

I realize the chains were messed up- I really need to work on those, thanks!
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racketify Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student General Artist
true but not that much.
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racketify Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student General Artist
One more thing, maybe the chain suppose to be like or maybe what I'm trying to say is the chain are alter in this dimension to look like this, so in a way it fit perfectly.
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KyseL Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Digital Artist
Congratulations! This was featured HERE!
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TheUnoriginal Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:la: Thank you so much!
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DCRPhotography Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Awesome work, and great concept.
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TheUnoriginal Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :D
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MandieEllie Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
So chaotic but so amazing~! I love the black and white contrast.
featured: [link]
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TheUnoriginal Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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Thank you so much! This is my first feature ever~ :D
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MandieEllie Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You are welcome~! :heart:
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M-J-Gagne Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad to hear that the humanities and sciences are now incorporating art into their curriculum ;).

This drawing makes me think of Slavador Dali's "The Persistence of Memory"[link], mostly in subject rather than style. The theme of being "Lost in Time" in your work suggests that purpose of the drawing is to capture our obsession with time; the need to break down our lives into chunks of measurable time. Even the observer's eye loses its bearing when looking at the image, since we are not sure which clock to at or whether or not we should be looking at the space in between.

Whereas Dali's work looked at the breaking down of our notions of fixed time (he was writing at the same time that Einstein was making his discoveries on relativity) and the subsequent feeling of disorder it brings, this work deals with how our obsession with time itself is inherently disordered and disorienting. I find it engaging.
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TheUnoriginal Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you- reading this made me super happy :D

While drawing this, the theme of humanity's obsession with time was one of the themes I was trying to put into this.

And about the first part of your comment -about art being in the curriculum- I'm a bit confused. :O_o: Art is actually being (slowly and painfully) taken out of our curriculum (if that's what you were saying? Sorry if I'm wrong)
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ArtisticInstinct Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So cool, I love it :3
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TheUnoriginal Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you~ :D
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ArtisticInstinct Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :D
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